I stand
Looking
Staring
Not idly gazing
At the barbs beneath the surface
Set there by man?
By fishes?
Or are they kelpie or mermaid wishes?
To snag an eye
To mesmerise
An unwary passerby
To hook
To catch
To reel them in
To fall face flat into that water
To die
I pass on by
Thatβs not for me this day

Yes, I’d totally pass on by too. Best not to leave certain things to chance!
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Thank you, Tony. One reason to pass on by is I took that photo from the top of a rather precipitous slope! In danger of slipping and falling in
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Talk about suffering for your art! π
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Oh I do, I do
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Brilliant piece I love it – the structure mimics its subject matter, short, punchy lines in the middle – To hook / To catch / To reel them inβcreate a quickening pace, like a line being pulled. You build momentum that makes the final “I pass on by” feel like genuine reliefπ
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Thank you. I feel myself blushing at such a compliment. But then you are a poet, and your understand these things
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You have got me wondering now- is there barbed wire in the water? maybe a fallen fence?
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No, it’s the reflection of the fence. But I like the ambiguity of it. As you say, is it in the water?
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Not a place I’d care to linger. Well done, Crispina.
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Thank you, Nancy. I think it was the mention of barbs and kelpie that does it!
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Ya think!? π
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A certain wickedness implied, perhaps
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I like this very much. Especially the last line πππ
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I thank you. It’s that haunting line from Lord of the Rings… “… but not this day.”
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An interesting photo.
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It called to me. My camera obeyed π₯°π₯°π₯°
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I didnβt write for this one and you did a good job of it
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Thank you, Sadje ππ₯°π₯°π₯°
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Youβre very welcome
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just perfectly matched words and photo. π
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Thank you, Willow ππ₯°
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Very interesting take, Crispina.
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Thank you, Indira ππ₯°
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You are welcome, dear.
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Such an interesting piece. Excellently done, Crispina.
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Thank you, Chris. I have my moments! π
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