To trip on First River’s chalk-rubble strewn bed was considered an ill omen. But Hegrea crossed with nothing worse than soggy shoes and the hem of her alder-red woven-wool dress.
Now to hasten home. Away for three years, this was no day for sauntering. What greeting awaited her? Who had survived?
51 words written for Sammi’s Weekend Prompt: Saunter
Wow, a great micro tale 😀
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It’s inspired by the book I’m currently writing. She has to cross the river. If you trip & fall, it means you’ll soon be dead.
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You’ve left us wondering about what happens next.
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I’m still writing the story. Hope to be ready to publish Summer 2023
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Nice take. Wishing you great success with your book.
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Thank you, Indira
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You are welcome, dear.
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🙂
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I guessed it was from a larger work. It works very well to hook the reader!
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I’m good at writing hooks. That’s what a book blurb is for!
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It’s a good thing to be good at. Well done.
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It is, yes. Just have to write the book to go with the hook
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Here’s hoping it’s friend, not foe.
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Indeed, yes.
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You left me wanting more! Nice.
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Excellent. I’ll keep you posted
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Ah, and indeed, would a bad omen find her, or did the water wash away what was left of it?
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She didn’t trip, so that was ok
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Whew. 😉 Bad omens are a bad omen. 😉
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If you trip on a stone, you’ll be dead as a bone before the next moon
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Can you define what kind of stone? How big the stone? Does it count as tripping if only your toe bumped into it? Does it count if you don’t fall? How dead is a bone? 😉
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Great questions. This is chalk rubble so it can vary in size, though not to boulder size. Bumping your toe doesn’t count. You have to trip, so you get wet. But even if you right yourself, it still counts.
Dead as a bone? The bone holds the spirit, so it’s not dead & gone forever, there’s a chance of rebirth
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Bumping your toe SHOULD count.
Just saying.
Then again, that hurts enough to count as its own ouchomen.
(re-assessing my relationship with bones…)
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Great story, Crispina. Ver poetic feel to it. Well done.
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Thank you, Bill
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As intriguing tales go, they don’t come better than this! Brilliant.
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Thank you, Keith. You flatter me
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Yes, so intriguing. You have me hooked now.
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Ok, so I see this is going to be my back-cover blurb when I get that far
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I have to agree. This would make for a great blurb for the story in progress. Excellent!
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Thank you, Dale. 135k into it! That will edit down somewhat before it goes to press.
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Whoa!
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About 3 chapters to go!
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Wow… you are something else!
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Yea, I know. 🙂 🙂 🙂 Modest with it
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😉
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Always 🙂
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