The Curse

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You cannot imagine how it is to live for so long not knowing why you remain young while others age, not knowing why you live while others die.

Then the memory returns. It doesn’t come to you slowly, piece by tantalising piece to be put together and hesitantly grasped; it comes all of a parcel and hits you in the face, the throat, the chest, the gut, the bowels. And you cry out: “Oh God, no!”


Written for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt: Longevity.

 

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Spinner of Asaric and Mythic tales
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63 Responses to The Curse

  1. Sadje says:

    Very intriguing.

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  2. Violet Lentz says:

    What an amazing opener this would make for a full length story! Excellent writing. I felt the blow.

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  3. Woah! Piqued my interest. So who is he/she? Werewolf? Can’t be a vampire… 🤔 Vampires don’t make bloody messes unless they really need to. See, now you’ve got my fantasy factory hooting…. 😄

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    • I chuckle. I like it. And what else might have longevity, even seeming immortality?

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      • Is it an incubus? An anthropod? A satan worshipping wizard? A man who sold his soul to el diablo? Oooh…Is it an evil Dr. whose experiment went woefully awry… a la Victor Frankenstein himself turning into a monster? Oooh…is it a demon who doesn’t know he’s a demon? It’s a humanoid…isn’t he? Can’t be a zombie…

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      • These are some wonderful guesses. I’ll give you a big clue:
        Feeling chuffed at His making of Adam, God called for His angels to gather around him.
        “Look!” He said. “Isn’t this the most exquisite creation?” And He bid them bow low in admiration.
        The angels of love readily fell to their knees. But those angels led by Azazael just plain refused.
        God beetled his brows. “You dare disobey me?”
        Azazael hitched his trousers before he answered, “Why should we, the sons of pure fire and light, fall down before this, of muck and water?” Which somewhat pissed-off our Mighty God.
        “Be banished!” God bellowed and caused a storm. “And may your feet forever be mucky and wet to remind you of your audacity.”
        Not quite the scenario, but close. 🙂

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      • Okay, did you just come up with this story to give me a clue or was it something you had already written because if you just came up with it on the spot… my goodness woman! You are a talented writer!

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      • It’s cut from the next story I shall be prepping for Kindle after The Spinner’s Game is published.

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      • Is it a Leviathan? 😛 Okay I am stopping now. You wrote it wonderfully and I loved it. Keep writing!

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      • It’s a fallen angel. Banished to earth for sins of creation

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  4. Judy says:

    A great lead in—-and surprise, surprise—-exactly 76 words!! Yeah I followed the link and did a word count to see if you followed the rules!! LOL!!! You did!!

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    • I’m a great rule-follower. I run my own prompts with a word-limit, I wouldn’t abuse someone elses.
      I don’t know if you’ve seen my other replies, but in short, this is an excerpt from what the original preface to what, in 2006, was titled In The Beginning and is now The Spinner’s Game. Since you have read it, you’ll understand it. You’ll also know why I didn’t use it. BTW, it was spoken by Raesan. How unlikely is that?

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      • Judy says:

        Well, the lead in has a different feel to me than Spinner’s Game. I can see it fits though on immortality. But, then if its Raesan’s thoughts, I am imbued with Kerrid’s manner of thinking. And, Raesan is way more moody.

        LOL I wasn’t saying you aren’t a rule follower or rule abuser as I think you have great discipline with words. But, you do have that wild maverick spirit too!!

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      • Mm, I like that word maverick. And I don’t suppose that piece does fit so well with what’s become of The Spinner’s Game. In 13 years, there are bound to be changes. One of them is the character of Raesan.

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      • Judy says:

        Absolutely there will be evolution in such world creating over time as things percolate in the mind of a writer. Sometimes with novels and series writing, there are spin off books about one of the characters. Maybe Raesan could be one. Ursula Le Guin actually from a character in a short story, Semley’s Necklace, who met Rocannon ended up thinking he needed his own story hence Rocannon’s World. That Lead In may come in useful…who knows??

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      • Raesan is one. He co-stars in Bellinn Road, which I hope to have ready to publish next summer 🙂

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      • Brian Bixby says:

        I was going to say: this doesn’t sound like Raesan.

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      • His character changed… considerably, during later versions. In this version he was the narrator. I got as far as Olun beneath the ice, and realised I needed to be in Kerrid’s head.

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      • Brian Bixby says:

        That’s always a tough call. I’ve been surprised at realizing how much the story changes based on who the POV character is.

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      • Which is why it’s so important to choose the right POV character. I experiemented with several for The Spinner’s Game. Raesan, & 1st person Kerrid. I also had a version of multiple vps. I tried omniscent. And you know which I went for. I think it was the right decision.

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      • Brian Bixby says:

        I can see major drawbacks with all the others, especially now having read on what you decide upon.

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      • Yea. I made the wrong choice with The King’s Wife, doing it multi VP but each as 1st person. That will be amended when I reach that part of the series 🙂

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  5. Jen Goldie says:

    Well penned Crispina in so few words. 🙂

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  6. Dale says:

    Oh Crispina! This is fantabulous! And Raesan, eh? I’m jealous of Violet…

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  7. Powerful and intriguing!

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